Near
~for Becky
Edging skyward, breathless
in thin air, the unknown pulsing
with expectation. We stood
overlooking the dark expanse
seeing, not seeing, a view
worth the climb. The moon
blushing in the glow of your skin.
You lean close and whisper,
mouth to ear, nearer. Near.
What grace did we wish in this
shared solitude,
beyond all, jittery
night creatures avoiding
the town’s lights? I remember,
and am glad we were there.
Wednesday, May 4, 2011
Near
For Three Word Wednesday, prompt words jitter, grace, thin.
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Oh and I'm glad I was there, too.
ReplyDeleteJust wonderful.
This is seriously romantic. Very well dome!
ReplyDeleteThat exhilaration of doing something daring in the dark just with someone you trust, finding a new world, and sharing it with someone you love. So well captured I feel the rush of excitement now. So well written Nico.
ReplyDeletethank you for bringing us there with these beautifully descriptive piece
ReplyDeleteSo much anticipation..sometimes the right people and the right time collide to make an adventure perfect and everlasting..jae
ReplyDeleteThis is just beautiful! I like it very, very much. Wonderful writing.
ReplyDelete"The moon blushing in the glow of your skin." Gorgeous line! This took me right back to the same kind of situation. I'm glad I was there, too. Thanks for the memory!
ReplyDeleteThat is one of the best romantic poems I have read for some time - just beautiful, clean and pure. Even the font you used matches the simple mood of sheer love.
ReplyDeleteRen, Thanks for journeying with me.
ReplyDeleteKim, Thank you--I'm rarely mistaken for a serious romantic, but I can come through if the situation arises!
Oldegg, Love sometimes settles into a habit, a customary relationship with no spark. I think it's good to remember the spark from time to time. Thanks!
Sheilagh, Your comments are always encouraging--thanks so much.
Jae, Absolutely! Often, the anticipation is more rewarding than the outcome. Or at least as rewarding. Some events are simply perfect in every regard. Thanks.
Susannah, Thank you for such a kind response--I'm happy you liked it!
Linda, Isn't it great that we can go back and relive such pleasurable events through word and memory? Thanks for your kindness.
Alt, I really wanted this one to come off well--always afraid of over-sentimentalizing these things, I rarely write romantic poems. Your approval means a lot to me, thanks!
"The moon / blushing in the glow of your skin." you do so paint a beautiful picture. truly "breathless" all the way to the end.
ReplyDeleteThe moon herself blushes- what a perfect line!
ReplyDeleteGreat poem overall.
stunning imagery.
ReplyDeletewell done.
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