For Three Word Wednesday, prompt words hinge, lethal, need. Very sparse form this week--laziness, or just a different style than my normal?
Falling Things
Crawl out
on a limb
too thin,
bends like
a hinge.
Stand
if you can.
Perch, hands
outstretched,
tip-most.
Quick
as a need,
breathe the
lethal moment.
Tenderly
sing,
mindful
of falling
things.
You made me very mindful!
ReplyDeleteI hope so--thank you.
DeleteThe words danced inside my head!
ReplyDeleteswirl it round and round
Thank you for reading musically.
DeleteWhen you are on the edge of things..you have to be necessarily sparse perhaps..an extra word..an extra thought..could just snap the branch..perfect too..jae
ReplyDeleteThat was the feeling I was hoping to achieve, anyway. Thanks.
DeleteI thank you.
ReplyDeleteIt is like the diving moment from a cliff in a waterfall or sea, the thought processes must be similar :-)
ReplyDeleteSo it is. I'm not afraid of heights, but of overly-rapid descent! Thanks.
DeleteEven thoughts are clipped to a minimum when at risk, especially of falling when pushing yourself to the limits. The adrenaline rush of being out on a limb is so well penned here.
ReplyDeleteThank you. Life is a balancing act, like being out on a limb. Exhilarating for some, terrifying for others.
DeleteSometimes the best rewards come from pushing that little bit more or, going out on that precarious edge. Very concise but, speak volumes.
ReplyDeleteThanks. Life can be easier if we learn how to balance, and how to fall.
DeleteI get two different impressions from this. The first is one's thoughts just before a physical plunge - the other is the feelings one must have when faced with a life changing downward spiral from the safe and secure. I'm probably wrong on both counts, but the poem is profoundly well done.
ReplyDeleteActually, you are probably right on both counts--thank you for your insightful reading.
ReplyDeleteYou must be mindful of many things, none more so than the falling ones.
ReplyDeleteI think being mindful of how close to the edge we are makes (or should make) us more compassionate. Thank you.
ReplyDeleteafter the first two stanzas, the word "Quick" made me want to jump...for fear of falling. I like the quick swift pace and flow.
ReplyDeleteThank you. I like that word "quick." Not really onomatopoeia, but it still seems to sound like it means. Like the word "murmur" . . .
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